This is a critique of Arththi's creative workshop paragraph.

• Use of language is accurate with no noticeable spelling mistakes.
• Good use of tense which was the past tense, however  the line "The source of the smoke lay in Halim's hands" was written mistakenly in present tense.
• a clear author's voice
• a writing style that is plausible and suitable for this kind of fiction with description that is true to Malaysian life and a good description of setting.
• There is no need for suspension of disbelief because it is a realistic work.
• It is well written that the images of the story can be reached and understood by the reader

Things I like:

• edgy and realistic material in the story like smoking ganja, family problems,etc
• Descriptions that is "Malaysian" like mango tree, the hot weather, mother's curry,etc

Things to improve on:

• More creative choice of words and sentences.
• a better flow from one action to the next, ie the flow of writing from ganja smoking to the inner thoughts of the character could be made to flow clearer.